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Wednesday, January 6, 2016

JOY WAS HER NAME



This was written for Poets United's Midweek Motif:


She never felt her heart break
She never made any mistakes
always cheering for the Ravens
always been amazing

Joy was her name
Never wanted any fame
But it came looking for her
Said it was what she deserved.

She never caused arguments
She never lost her patience
always loving her husband
always been called good looking

Joy was her honor
Never wanted any fame
But it came searching for her
Said it was her soul to blame.

She never said no to anyone
She never envied other matrons
always jovial and festive
always kind and impressive

Joy was her title
Never wanted any fame
It came to expose her candle
Said she had to be claimed.

Then she never came out anymore
and she never opened her doors
always stayed inside
until she lost her mind.

30 comments:

  1. Lovely! This is my new favorite of all your poems :D Joy is her name...sigh..:D

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    1. hehehe...thanks Sanaa! have a joyful one!

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  2. Yikes! And having just read Thotpurge's poem I cannot help thinking of yours as the other side! One predator continually fights the other as if jealous. And here, why could not the joy be left in place? Why nibble away seeking the underside that may not be there? I don't think Joy is always a mask, for me it is as real as my closeness to spirit! But loss is real, so maybe there is no resurrection for this Joy?

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    1. hi Susan, it all depends on the turn of events. but I ended this poem this way to give it more of a Poe or Stine flavor. in other words, I felt my poem was too ideal, too good to be true, that I just had to make it end tragically for the sake of those whose joys have always been stolen by malicious fiends. :) thanks for the comment.

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  3. Joy was her name...
    i like this part
    very nice write..
    good luck James Toma

    (http://imagtalks.blogspot.com)

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    1. Hi NSK, thanks for the comment. same to you too friend. I will definitely visit yours.

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  4. Love it... I like this perspective!!

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  5. The surprise ending works really well to jolt the reader. I was picturing this happy woman, and was not expecting her to lose her mind. I suppose she wasnt expecting it either, LOL.

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    1. hehehe...thanks Sherry for this positive review. have a good night1

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  6. By the way, I love your blog photo. Beautiful.

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    1. thanks Sherry, it's of Washington, DC. it is pretty. hehe.

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    1. I guess you can say that. thanks for the comment!

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  8. James, this really awed me!! One of your best!

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    1. thanks for the comment, Mary. I try. :)

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  9. is her new name - unjoy?

    enjoyed the read.

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    1. it can certainly be...after what happened to her. thanks Totomai.

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  10. I love the twist in this poem James - very interesting..joy can be snuffed out quick as a candle flame..such a shame that the world can intrude open our soul and how we feel

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    1. yup, so very true. thanks for the comment Jae. :)

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    1. that's good to hear. glad you enjoyed it. thanks for the comment, Gazal!

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  12. Beautiful poem! Lovely last lines...

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    1. thank you Amit! glad you liked it. :)

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  13. Awesome!The concluding part is really beautiful...:)

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    1. thank you Panchali! :) have a great one!

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